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for you i would catch summer
like a teen catching glory on a lean silver bicycle-
ripping through the streets of Triumph and Nostalgia
as if i could conquer or escape each one
and rise- rise- rise with the reddening
of your cheek as it mirrors our desire-

i will chase you until my starving hands
can feel no curves; until my eyes cannot contain
the bursting of your colours like parachutes on a stale
blue sky; until my mouth no longer tastes the days of August
on your lips- 

your season lingers
like a haze in the sahara:
some oversaturated mirage,

 
or maybe just a miracle
that winked out too fast.

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chadwood Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014   Writer
I love these important incredible emotions conveyed in this writing.

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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
Thank you! :)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I push and strain and race,
always going for just a little more than before,
to go faster, to go longer,
to be better, to be stronger.

I push and shove and climb and run and strain.
I cannot rest, because rest means stopping,
and stopping means defeat.

Defeat what? I've forgotten. Myself perhaps.
Time? Even more likely.
So short a time do I have to run, to fly.
Because every candle burns out in the end,
and every shooting star falls too fast.

You inspired this! Thank you! :huggle:
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014
:hug: Beautiful! I'm glad the inspiration is contagious. :) Thank you for sharing that with me; there's something really special about seeing that I can help others make amazing art.
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed. It's dedicated to you, so thanks. :)
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
:blush: Well, I'm honored!
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:bow: Take a bow!
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
:bow: ;)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2014
:) Thank you very much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello :wave:
You have been featured in my weekly dA love for everyone! article.
Have a nice day! :dalove:
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014
:) Hi! Thank you very much, and you too! :hug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, thank you! :heart:
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aglawrence Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Really enjoyed the rhythms and images. 

Particularly the "lean silver bicycle" and the "starving hands". 

There seems to be a kind of "hunger/starving", "life/ death", "youth/age" dichotomy going on. The second stanza talks about longing to enjoy things and through that enjoyment, using them up.

The first stanza talks about the thrill and rush of the chase, the second stanza is the result--the chase brings about its own end

And then I like that the ending is ambiguous. Does the chase end abruptly or does it linger? Does life/love/youth end in a flash or does it dry out?

I don't know. I guess it's sort of impossible to know. That made the poem especially interesting for me.
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
Thank you! 

You hit on a lot of things that I thought about while writing this, although you certainly fleshed them out better than I did in my head. I think we have a tendency to chase for chasing, and I left things ambiguous because I'm not quite sure what the effects of that are yet. 
I'm glad you liked it, and I really enjoyed reading your comment as well. :)
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WhisperingWillow19 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That's amazing.  Your word usage is fantastic.  


~Fang. 
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
:) thank you very much!
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WhisperingWillow19 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome.  Keep up the fantastic work!  :D 


Fang. 
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anobrain Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
lovely :heart:
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
thank you :)
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SurvivingExtinction Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So beautiful... :)
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1nkl1ng Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
thanks! :)
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SurvivingExtinction Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
De nada. :D
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